Score: 8

"Great Images, Less Substance"

submission: Intro to Kara's Memories

date: November 18, 2009

You really have a nice handle for colors and gradients, especially towards the end with the lake and the violet sky. The music was also not bad. To be honest though, nothing stood out about your acting; it had a few good spots and a few bad. One thing that probably irks me more than others, though is your script.

It may be a short video, but you put a lot of narration into it, and honestly it sounded a touch cliched, and kinda forced, as if you were trying to make something sound more significant or poetic than it was. I can't really advise you on what to do about that, but I'd say at least go through your script one more time and try to revise it (the city lights like stars simile for example - I'm sure you can come up with something more original than that).

Still, the look alone is promising enough to make me look forward to more. Nice job. (4/5, 8/10)

Score: 8

"Sweet and Simple"

submission: Dijurido: Her Memory

date: November 18, 2009

If brushing on emotions was your only objective, you've achieved it beyond any doubt. The colors you used worked very nicely with the music; you definitely got a mood across. I'd say the color/background of the flash-back could've been more interesting, and for me the point seemed a bit too simple, but overall this animation is very nicely done. Good work. (4/5, 8/10)

Score: 8

"Rather *ahem* Promising"

submission: The Promises

date: November 18, 2009

You've got a nice look going. The plot was simple but not quite cliched, (personally I wish you'd left the last twist out so as to make for a darker movie, but maybe that's just me) Were you using bitmaps to get that creepy texture? It worked quite nicely, though I'm amazed how small you got the file, considering...

Animation-wise, the simplest advice I could give would be to use some angles other than front, back and side. It's certainly harder, but I think films like this could really benefit from that variety. Overall, it was a nice piece, I look forward to see more from you. (4/5, 8/10)