RPGsrok's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[A Rhino's Stomach]

Unique to say the least

Well you certainly straddled the line there between cute and disgusting a few times, and I don't get the impression you've studied rhino's much, but who cares? I doubt I'll ever see quite the same take on a hungry animal. You had some good animation in there, and the plot was clear and whatnot. I don't really get what the plants with food bait were supposed to be, if anything, but it's a minor issue. It's good stuff. (4/5, 9/10)

As for your supposed sound problems (if you're still worrying about it), I can't say for sure, but if you're getting a message from flash about a sound related error when you export, it's probably a certain sound or frame causing your woe. If you can isolate where it is (delete scenes, parts of scenes, etc until you don't get the error when you export, delete smaller sections over time until you find the cause) you can fix it by changing the sound from event to stream or even by moving it to another layer. I can't guarantee it'll work, but that's my advice. Hope it helps.

[The lazyway]

We're gonna need a rube goldberg collection...

This was actually not that bad as far as rube goldberg animations go. Despite the simple style, you got a good sense of one step triggering the next, so that it felt as real as it needed to. It somewhat lacked the punch I think you were going for at the end, with the realization of what the machine was doing, but I don't know how to improve on that... Maybe some sort of introductory sequence raising or even setting a certain expectation?

Overall it definitely achieved what it set out to do, and was pleasantly entertaining. Good work. (4/5, 8/10)

[Tea.]

Lots of Style, lacks a punchline

You say your animation was bad, but I actually didn't mind it that much. It goes with the playful 'plot' of the animation well. Moreover, it's clear despite the simple style that you put some effort into it, and that's what counts. Music and whatnot was all fine, though voices would probably be better than text.

The main problem for me was the lack of a punchline. I mean, what the guy does with the tea is funny but the last event and the last line didn't seem that much more significant than the others. It feels like there's no point, even though it's kinda funny. Still, it had its good moments, and the tea genre is sadly lacking in flash xD. Not bad overall, I look forward to more. (3/5, 7/10)

[Rube Goldberg DVD]

Nice piece of work

By no means perfect, as you know, but it really was surprisingly good. I won't focus too much on criticism, since this seems to be such an old animation. Animation seemed edgy, probably cuz of your time limit, and I couldn't really get a sense of how the parts of the rube goldberg related to each other (the incidents seemed a bit too isolated).

Still, the animation was serviceable and the the ending was priceless. The music helps it a lot as well. Overall, a decidedly good movie. (4/5, 8/10)

[Icarus]

Nice Work for Short Time

For having only 1 month to do this, it's not a bad film. Icarus and the other lizard both had a lot of personality in their animation, and though I have no idea if this was your intention or not, I've love to see some more shorts involving him. The story was short and simple and although I think you could make it funnier (if you wanted to) by really having the robot bully Icarus and having the robot be surprised when he transforms, it was fine as is.

My main complaints are aesthetic and not that absolute. I found the robots a bit bland, they seemed too human in design. The backgrounds also lacked detail and the little flare that makes these places look interesting and lived in. Some elements of the plot didn't make sense, but I got the impression that wasn't much of a concern here.

Nonetheless, for a month's animation, it was pretty good. Hope to see more from you. (4/5, 7/10)

[Planetoid - Original]

Original, intriguing

This is the first thing of yours that I've watched, and I have to say you have a style all your own, assuming you keep that animation look throughout your work. It's a unique mix of 2D and 3D (or pseudo-3D; I'm not sure exactly what you're doin to make these).

Honestly, the actual look doesnt quite suit me; it's not artistic, its not comedic - there seems to be no reason behind it. The coloration, for example - the stars seem really simplistic as if you didn't put that much into them, whereas the ship and the planet used those bitmaps or whatever they were and had a lot of detail. Again, I don't know if you address anything like this in your later stuff, and moreover, clearly, a lot of people like it, though, so don't change it all because of me. And I like the actual story in there, has an interesting point despite being so short.

Anyways, even if it doesn't sit that well with me, it's still good work, better than most on NG. Keep it up, and good luck. (4/5, 7/10)

Fate responds:

I don't keep this style, for sure.
I like to think it grows into something even more unique.
And cleaner.

The stars, in the new version, took me forever to choose...

[Silence world]

Interesting Work

It has a nice artistic mood that is missing from many of NG's works. It does seem lacking in story though; it's not that it's minimalistic - I think that works well - but it doesn't really have a sense of a moral or epiphany. To be fair, I haven't seen any of your other work, and some people have referenced some other stuff you've done as being better, but all I'm saying is that this could be worked on. Animation is decent, but it's the subject and not the animation that stands out. Overall, there's a lot of potential here, and I look forward to more. (4/5, 7/10)

[The Last Fight]

Lots of Potential, lots to improve upon

You have a great art style going here. The animation itself, as you may have heard, could be smoother, and if you feel like spending time making more frames for each animation, the movie will end up better. However, the use of black lines, and the color choice was very appealing. The blur and grain effects were also very nice. (how are you doing the blur? is it CS3 or CS4 flash, or are you using another program? It's awesome either way.)

The main thing I'd suggest would be to abandon the subtitles. I'd recommend recruiting some voice actors for something like this. True, you have music going and voices could undermine it, but I think its better to lower the music when the characters talk; the story is better that way. Voices would also require lip sync, but if you think it's too hard or are just feeling lazy, you can always just animate the mouth opening and closing. It can work well, and doesn't take that much effort.

At the very least, try using your animation to make story points instead of writing it in subtitles. For example, instead of writing "there's too many" you could show the character looking around, and all the enemies as a blur around him.

This is already a good piece of work, but I think you can improve. Good luck, I'm looking forward to your next project. Vote: 4/5 Review: 7/10

[Tales of Horror - Walter]

Lots of Potential

As far as the plot went, I thought you did quite well. Despite, a bit of a cliche' feel, there was still a sense of suspense, and the point came across.

As others before me have said though, I'd really suggest you work on your animation. It's not like everyone can draw well, but even things like altering camera angles, or using a few gradients can make your work more engaging. Taking the first example, it seemed like most of your figures were drawn from the front on; I'd suggest trying a few side or back shots, and if you're feeling ambitious, try drawing as if looking slightly up or down upon the character (not straight up or down - angled). Even using close-ups on the face can have impact and vary the look of the movie.

You have a lot of potential. Keep trying, and good luck. 3/5, 7/10

[Look up at the sky]

A Matter of Taste

As far as looping flashes go, this is just hypnotic at times. The sync to the song was just amazing as far as the color changes and even the glowing headphones. Some people won't like that, and I prefer some narratives as well, but given your other work, I can see you're more than capable of telling a story. It seems like this was done pretty quickly; the only thing I'd really recommend is improving the star bitmap towards the end, either by finding a more interesting picture, or drawing one (just seemed a bit monochromatic to me).

3 questions:
how'd you create that grainy effect?
about how long did it take to make the flash?
WHERE CAN I GET THAT MUSIC? It's stuck in my head now XD

I've seen better from you, but good work nonetheless. 4/5, 8/10

Celarent responds:

-trasparent pngs
-Around 2 days
-http://www.esnips.com/doc/24e1fb77-5 0fc-4044-bc3d-6c74a6e9d726/Zabutom-Si ne_Ride