Score: 8

"Great Images, Less Substance"

submission: Intro to Kara's Memories

date: November 18, 2009

You really have a nice handle for colors and gradients, especially towards the end with the lake and the violet sky. The music was also not bad. To be honest though, nothing stood out about your acting; it had a few good spots and a few bad. One thing that probably irks me more than others, though is your script.

It may be a short video, but you put a lot of narration into it, and honestly it sounded a touch cliched, and kinda forced, as if you were trying to make something sound more significant or poetic than it was. I can't really advise you on what to do about that, but I'd say at least go through your script one more time and try to revise it (the city lights like stars simile for example - I'm sure you can come up with something more original than that).

Still, the look alone is promising enough to make me look forward to more. Nice job. (4/5, 8/10)

Score: 8

"Sweet and Simple"

submission: Dijurido: Her Memory

date: November 18, 2009

If brushing on emotions was your only objective, you've achieved it beyond any doubt. The colors you used worked very nicely with the music; you definitely got a mood across. I'd say the color/background of the flash-back could've been more interesting, and for me the point seemed a bit too simple, but overall this animation is very nicely done. Good work. (4/5, 8/10)

Score: 8

"Rather *ahem* Promising"

submission: The Promises

date: November 18, 2009

You've got a nice look going. The plot was simple but not quite cliched, (personally I wish you'd left the last twist out so as to make for a darker movie, but maybe that's just me) Were you using bitmaps to get that creepy texture? It worked quite nicely, though I'm amazed how small you got the file, considering...

Animation-wise, the simplest advice I could give would be to use some angles other than front, back and side. It's certainly harder, but I think films like this could really benefit from that variety. Overall, it was a nice piece, I look forward to see more from you. (4/5, 8/10)

Score: 9

"Looking forward to the real thing."

submission: Flying dog house (EP0)

date: November 18, 2009

This concept seems interesting, and you have a really good mastery of colors. As trailers go, the text passed just a bit too fast, and the music seemed to change a little awkwardly, but overall, it was very nice. I'm not sure whether you've finished it by now, since this movie was posted a long time ago, but I'm certainly looking forward to seeing it! (4/5, 9/10)

(my Japanese isn't very good, and Newgrounds doesn't let us use japanese text, but for your benefit, I'll try to translate my thoughts below)

Kono kangae wa zehi omoshirosou desu. Iro no koto yoku tsukaeru dayo. Trailer toshite, honbun wa chotto hayasugita, soshite ongaku wo kawatta toki wa chotto hen deshita kedo, daitai iiyo. Eiga ga mou tsukuri owataka shirimasen kedo, tanoshimi ni matteimasu!

Score: 9

"An Important, if not Well Done Flash"

submission: Aerial Gunning

date: November 18, 2009

As first flashes go, I've seen plenty worse, technique wise. Notably though, this is one of only a few flashes with serious messages of those sort on Newgrounds, and it's quite well done in that respect. Technique wise, the animations are choppy but pretty good (animating animals is hard dammit!). I suppose my only criticism other than making the movements smoother would be removing green from the color scheme; it's being a bit anal, but I think it would make the mood still more potent to be rid of such a lively color. A preloader would also be nice.

But this movie's flaws are much redeemed by its message, which is indeed depressing, but very important to get out there. Whether or not you continue on that subject for your flash though, I'll certainly look forward seeing more. (4/5, 9/10)

Score: 7

"Decent Adaption of an Excellent Story"

submission: <robot dreams>

date: November 18, 2009

Asimov's story has not received many adaptations, and as such this is a welcome flash. However, I personally thought the addition of humor to the story didn't work very well, both because I didn't find it particularly funny, and because it's a serious story. I also found some of the designs, particularly that of the robot itself to be a bit to cartoonish for the serious subject matter. Finally, the voices needed work, both acting wise, and in the case of Dr. Calvin, quality wise (though the subtitles solved most of the latter problem).

Despite its problems, I'd love to see more adaptations, and I'm sure you can improve. Nice job. (3/5, 7/10)

Score: 8

"Unique concept, needed to be shortened"

submission: Breath Me Remake

date: November 18, 2009

I liked the concept and the beginning of the film. It really is a unique take on the idea of death. However, it seems like the movie was stretched out a bit too long in the middle. I really liked the imagery you used, but sometimes it just seemed like you could've taken it out, and made your point more concisely. Your style, however, yields an original take on the concept of death, and the music fits well. Good work. (4/5, 8/10)

Score: 8

"Interesting Concept, Needs work"

submission: --Nightmare--

date: November 18, 2009

You definitely captured the mood of a twisted short story, the creature from the nightmare was particularly well done. The suicide does seem a little unprompted, as if there should've been something else, even a few insane cuts to the face of the creature, before he shoots himself. If it's because it was an adaption, and the info wasn't there to begin with, that's understandable.

In either case though, I'd suggest putting some more details into your backgrounds. The gradients became a bit bland after awhile, especially in contrast to the well done characters. Even putting a few black shadows to suggest a form might have helped.

Nonetheless, it achieved what it set out to do. Just a few little improvements and you'll be set. (4/5, 8/10)

Score: 9

"Interesting movie, Great water"

submission: Reversion

date: November 18, 2009

Of the various takes on "rainy day" I've seen, this was quite good, especially towards the end - some very nice reflections. The beginning seemed a little lacking, boring almost due to the single angle and the bland clouds, but overall it was a good animation. Very underrated, at the least. (4/5, 9/10)

Score: 10

"Excellent and Meaningful"

submission: Duet of the Hunt

date: November 18, 2009

A unique concept in the hands of a great animator should yield an animation this good. The music, the color scheme and the animation fit perfectly together, and make for a mesmerizing movie. The mix of elegance and death has probably been done before, but scarcely has it come together this way or this well. The only thing I could possibly suggest would be to experiment in making movies on different subjects. Looking forward to seeing more from you. (5/5, 10/10)